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HARROGATE dealt with another blow to its economy this week as Royal Bank of Scotland staff were told their jobs had been axed.
While just weeks earlier RBS announced its half a year profits off £1.1billion, making the cut a massive disbelief to staff and the surrounding district.
More than 500 jobs will go at Central house in Otley Road by next September
Cuts that are due to be made are in roles that have been given the axe will be in the back office of the centre, the units include retail and business with some call centre staff.
Some of these jobs, are due to be moved contracted offshore to countries such as India and America.
Described by Unite National Officer Rob Macgregor as a ‘"bitter pill for staff to swallow".
Harrogate MP Andrew Jones is urging RBS bosses to rethink ‘last week staffs were told that this centre is one of the company's best performers. It makes no sense to close a strong performer.’
RBS believe: "Having to cut jobs is the most difficult part of our work to rebuild RBS and repay taxpayers for their support.
Harrogate borough council’s economic development manager Kathryn Daly, adds to the and describes the company ‘as a key-economic company ‘
The business first moved into the Harrogate offices in 1997 and accommodates loyal staff that have been there from the beginning.
However some of the workforce could be offered similar roles at venture capital business Advent-Bain, which bought most of RBS’s global merchant business.

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The article was simply to long when i started to place it ,this shows why the pyramid scheme is needed as the additional 'padding' information was not needed so it was easily cut.

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HARROGATE could see the opening of the first permanent skate park by January, the borough council have been rethinking their plans since the success and popularity of the temporary skate park.
The skate park which is said to be located at the valley gardens is said to go before planners by November. Teenage skaters, bikers and bladers have submitted their ideas that have been included in the design plans aiding to the support of the plans.
A substantial £140, 00 has been put aside by the council for the new skate park and BMX facility with some of the money coming from community safety and grants.
The proposal that is getting put before the planners, hopes that the feature will sit alongside the tennis courts. Many hope the plans will be accepted and the park will become a central place for skaters and bikers.



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HARROGATE could see the opening of the first permanent skate park by January, the borough council have been rethinking their plans since the success and popularity of the temporary skate park.
The skate park which is said to be located at the valley gardens is to go before planners by November. Teenage skaters, bikers and bladers have submitted their ideas that have been included in the design plans aiding to the support of the plans.
A substantial £140, 00 has been put aside by the council for the new park and BMX facility with some of the money coming from community safety and grants

Article 5 -First draft

A TWO inch scorpion was discovered on the streets of Harrogate this week.
The exotic creature was found on Mayfield grove in the centre of the town and handed to police by residents who were passing by.
Police are now trying to trace the scorpion’s origins and would like know how such a creature from a hot climate could be found in the streets or Harrogate.
This particular scorpion is thought to be a bealychas infuscatus female from Singapore, although similar breeds could be found in the Middle East.
With a sting from this particular breed of scorpion leaving a victim in fatal condition police are eager to find anyone with any information on the matter.



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This article was too big for a short article, i cut out minor information such as 'With a sting from this particular breed of scorpion leaving a victim in fatal condition police are eager to find anyone with any information on the matter' to make the article fit.

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THE RIVER NIDD and the surrounding town saw more than 20,000 people gather on the streets to support the popular Great Knaresborough Bed Race, which took place last Saturday.
An impressive 630 competitors took part, equalling into 90 teams who had a tiny 45 minutes to finish the race which consist of contestant racing their bed as fast as they can around the river and finally taking a strenuous dip into the chilly waters of the Nidd itself.
This year Ripon Runners for HPL came first at an impressive time of thirteen minutes and fifty-six seconds.

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All I changed was the beginning of the article making only 'THE' appearing in block capitals to represent a newspaper typical generic conventions .The article was the right size and gave the correct information for a small article so i kept the rest the same .