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Draft & Final -Article 7

Harrogate gets the 5 Stars

RESTAURANTS, Cafes, Deli’s, Sandwich Shops, Pubs, Takeaways, Butchers and School Canteens in the Harrogate District have now been awarded star rating based on the factors of quality or service and management, the cleanliness of the premise and hygiene hoping to raise standards in the area.
The ratings that have been awarded are listed on Harrogate Councils scores on the doors website although premises are been encourage to display them. Five star ratings have been awarded to premises such as Betty’s and Fodder.
As this was only a small article,I did not need to change it by cutting it down or re-ordering. This is because it gave all the information needed all in the right order.

Draft and Final -Article 8
Hospitals alarming capacity

HARROGATE HOSPITAL capacity has risen 15 per cent hitting winter levels this month, leaving little room for patients.
At the alarming 97 per cent capacity, the hospital is asking residents if they really need emergency attention as there is so little bed space.
The increase has led to concerns that staff will not be able to cope over the colder period because of the hospital being so busy at this time.
Although the hospital has coped with the recent rise, preparation for the winter months has now started, as the hospital has now started.
The hospital are now looking into bringing extra bed capacity and is expecting the Farndale Ward to be re-opened in early December following a multi-million pound refurbishment.

Again I left the article as it was and my audience seemed happy with it too.the article was another short one however if I needed to I could of expanded it .

Draft & Final-Article 9
Bargain fashion store 'Primark' prepare for autumn opening

HARROGATE is set to be welcoming bargain fashion store Primark to Cambridge Street in late autumn.
Retail giant Arcadia sold the lease of BHS in the mid winter to the Primark group and since then an immense amount of work has been taking place to prepare for the opening.
It was expected that the super saving store would open in July just gone, although much to many of the public’s disappointment there is still and extensive amount of work to be done to prepare for the opening.
Although there has been no official date set, confirmation that the opening would be towards the end of the year was placed through job adverts for store roles this week.
Rebecca Lunn is delighted about the opening of Primark ‘it will be useful to have in the centre as it avoid going to Leeds and back and will be there when you need an item straight away it will also provide me a massive saving on my part time wage as will no longer have to spend large amount on clothing that quickly goes out of fashion and shrinks in the wash’
Furthermore not everyone shares the same view of the opening Iris Allen disagrees with this as she fears it will ‘bring a cheap feel to Harrogate making the streets a lot busier and risking smaller independent clothing stores go bust’
Primark had indicated that it will have an extensive refurbishment and will provide the community with a bunch of new jobs as well as bargain clothing wear which is predicted to cause a war with popular surrounding shops such as River Island and H & M.
The company which has 139 stores in the U.K so far has of clothes made specifically for the company with the most famous brand Atmosphere to come of Primark being a massive success across the Europe.
2005 saw Primark score the lowest of all clothing chains with 3.5 out of 20 only being rewarded on an ethical index that ranks criteria such as workers' rights causing a huge setback with since Primark has bounced back from.
With the company positioning itself as marketing fashionable clothing at extremely competitive prices.
Although there is a lot of disagreement about the upcoming shop, many hope the final outcome will be just what Harrogate needs and give many people jobs that are needed.
Job advertisements from page 21

This article is going to be quite a main feature on the second page,i included quotes in argumentative styles and back ground information to pad the article out.The only thing that had to be changed was spelling.

Draft & Final -Article 10


Massive sets of roadworks predict heavy traffic this summer

MASSIVE sets of roadwork’s have began over the Harrogate district this week and are set to cause heavy traffic due to the worst winter Great Britain have seen in over thirty years.
Across the district there has been £10.5 million agreed to re-build the terrible roads.
After the heavy battering of snow the roads have taken, £ 3.4 million has been allocated to the Harrogate district with Knaresborough and Harrogate itself has been set £1.9 million.
Some of the money comes from the unexpected tax rise and has been put towards paying for the roadwork’s, in order to repair the many of un-even roads that are covered in potholes and make it very difficult to drivers on their routes.
The roadwork’s which are set to last until Christmas with the heavily used roads such as the areas of schools and main roads such as Leeds and Skipton roads are due to be done first .
The heavily used roads have been prioritised were either strategically important or needed to be repaired by September to minimise disruption for school traffic
The north Yorkshire county council have reassured the community that the repairs will avoid the busiest peaks of the morning and evening periods and will try to have the work repaired later on in the evening to avoid congestion.
In many cases the roads will need to be closed to allow repair to be done to the best of their standards.
The work which began on Monday saw many busy environments change such as Otley Road and Leeds Road.
Eleanor Connor who lives on Leeds Road commented on how the usual active road was ‘completely ghostly and unusually quite’.
Other roads which are set to have some disruption are High Street, Bond End, Park Row, Wetherby road and some part of Otley Road.
While busy roads will be completed before Christmas, many minor routes won’t be completed until next year.
Although there is going to be some inconvenience to motorist the county council are doing the best they can to keep delay to minimum.
With roadwork’s going as expected, the council are hopeful the roads will be in a much better shape and with be able to face terrible winters to come.
Signs will be posted around the area before the work begins and alternate routes will be signposted while the closures are in place.

This article is quite informative; I followed the pyramid to keep the article well structured. My audience feedback was 'well structured and infromative'.The article did not need any big changes, only minor such as spelling and punctuation.

1st draft and second draft-Article 11

Majestic hotel set to re-open

THE MAJESTIC HOTEL is due to re-open this September, when it will have been closed for nearly four months.
The hotel that suffered a major fire in May took the life of kitchen porter Nigel Butterfield, 41.
The hotels are planning to open west wing with 88 bedrooms after the serve fire and water damage.
The east wing will still have remaining work but the hotel have structured the building agenda so their guest will not be disturbed.
Charles Prew, CEO of Barceló UK claims that” by April 2011 the renovation of the damaged section will have been finished and this important landmark will be restored to its former glory at the heart of Harrogate.
We are very proud of how well the team from the Majestic have coped with this unfortunate situation and deeply grateful to both local business and individuals who have been so supportive of our efforts,”
More than 50 staff are expected to return in September, many of the staff have been working in other Barceló hotels during closure.
With the hotel being shut for nearly four months the hotel has also being given the chance for a few makeovers through the hotel.
Vince Johnson, general manager of the Barceló Harrogate Majestic Hotel explains that "we have taken the opportunity while the hotel has been shut to redecorate and newly carpet the lobby and most of the magnificent public areas.
The hotel’s leisure club is also having a significant makeover and will reopen fully by early October.
In November we are hoping that local craftsman Lee Simone will have finished restoring the celebrated murals in the North and South Lounges.
We will reopen the sumptuous main dining room in all its glory in time for Christmas parties and weddings,”
The project is in safe hands as it is being led by architects FGF Associates who have been working with the hotel for over 15 years.

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THE Majestic Hotel is due to re-open this September, when it will have been closed for nearly four months.
The hotel that suffered a major fire in May took the life of kitchen porter Nigel Butterfield, 41.
The hotels are planning to open west wing with 88 bedrooms after the serve fire and water damage.
Charles Prew, CEO of Barceló UK claims” by April 2011 the renovation of the damaged section will have been finished and this important landmark will be restored to its former glory at the heart of Harrogate’
More than 50 staff are expected to return in September, many of the staff have been working in other Barceló hotels during closure.
Vince Johnson, general manager of the Majestic explains that "we have taken the opportunity while the hotel has been shut to redecorate and newly carpet the lobby and most of the magnificent public areas.
The hotel’s leisure club is also having a significant makeover and will reopen fully by early October.
We will reopen the sumptuous main dining room in all its glory in time for Christmas parties and weddings,”
The project is being led by architects FGF Associates who have been working with the hotel for over 15 years.
The article was too long and went into too much detail; I cut the article down and only included the most important quotes and details in the article that the viewer would want to read.

Draft & final-Article 12

Vital witness sought after Co-op Robbery.

HARROGATE POLICE are pleading for witnesses, following a robbery at Otley Road Co-op.
Locally the shop known as the ‘Little Co-op’ saw the incident took place on Sunday the 11th June at 8:45pm.
Luckily no one was hurt although the 20 year old cashier was threatened with a knife.
However the robber left the shop before the cashier has chance to open the till.
The description of the man who carried out the attempted robbery is a white male of 5ft 9in and 6ft 1in tall with an average build.
At the time of the incident the man was thoroughly dressed in black along with a knitted balaclava covering his face.
When he left the premises the offender headed down an alleyway to the side of the shop in the direction of the town.
Anyone who knows anything of the incident please contact Lydia Davenport, of Harrogate CID, on 0845 60 60 24 7 .

Draft & Final Article 13

No change in car charges
Locals will be glad to hear that there will be no increase in parking charges within the next year.
In Harrogate, just the Victoria multi-storey car park will rise by 20p per hour.

Both article 12 & 13 were not changed as they were so small there was no need for adjustments or adding more as simply that would be unnecessary